I think you tried to pack too much into this short. I wanted to develop a likeness towards the characters, but as far as I can tell they were born, then they met, then they fell in love in less than a minute.
I think it might have been worth trying to tackle one aspect of this story line. Perhaps you could have introduced the characters in a way that implies they have known each other for a long time.
The main point is that the animation felt very rushed. Hope this helps improve your work :)
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